It’s time for one last remix of My Aching Back… and with this post comes the news that the original poem will be published in Kokako, a fine journal of Japanese forms published in New Zealand. It’s wonderful to see this poem reaching a wide audience. So now, it’s over to Lyndon to give it one last spin…
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My Aching Back: Lyndon Norton Remix
Side 1 – jo – preface
Link #1 (3 lines) – hokku (autumn)
my aching back
a leaf falls
from a branch
(Matt Hetherington)
Link #2 (2 lines) – wakiku (autumn)
as I put down the rake
the sky darkens
(Lyndon Norton)
Link #3 (3 lines) – daisan (non seasonal)
cold night
our words
left hanging
(Cindy Keong)
Side 2 – ha part one – development
Link #4 (2 lines) – winter moon
stuck up a tree
winter moon
(Andy Smerdon)
Link #5 (3 lines) – non seasonal
not even the radio
tonight
a bus passes
(Jonathan Hadwen)
Link #6 (2 lines) – non seasonal
the old dog dreams
of the chase
(Mal Keeble)
Side 3 – ha part two – intensification
Link #7 (3 lines) – spring blossom
along the edge
of her grave
a row of daffodils
(Cindy Keong)
Link #8 (2 lines) – spring
shadows shrink
sun cannot warm the air
(John Wainwright)
Link #9 (3 lines) – non seasonal
behind teeth
a storm gathers
I cannot swallow this
(Nigel Ellis)
Side 4 – kyu – finale
Link #10 (2 lines)- non seasonal, love verse
all that remains
broken on the shoreline
(Cindy Keong)
Link #11 (3 lines) – non seasonal, love verse
incoming tide
waiting for
the next wave
(Cindy Keong)
Link #12 (2 lines) – ageku (summer)
nothing matters
after sunset
(Carly Jay Metcalfe)