Shisan: My Aching Back (Links #10 – #11)

As the shisan builds to a crescendo, it seems fitting that we burst into the theme of love for links #10 and then #11. Love is such a wild landscape, so I was very keen to see where people were going to land with their offerings.

John started things off playfully, revealing the nut within after being kissed and returned later to be kissed again while watching his lover fold the wing mirrors back… such a sexy image!

Andy delivered an image that continues to startle for its original link… the presence of the china doll so beautifully lets the seething air out of Nigel’s previous verse, and although seemingly fragile, has enough strength to keep hold of his hand.

Likewise, Chloe’s link startles for its originality… the image of a bite wrapped in a scarf has a searing beauty and again adds a passionate dimension to the previous poem.

Cindy fills us with a heartbroken longing as we stand, completely empty, on the shore. Love can be a desolate place sometimes…

Miguel gives us two poems that bristle with the urgency of love… one exhaling a name in a cloud of steam and the other exploding from the lips.

Mal also gives us two poems, one of which playfully connects two hands as the change is fumbled and the other which strips things to bare metal.

And finally Jonathan maintains his gentle sense of playfulness, shaving once for work and once for his lover.

As you can see, there are many links here that I myself have fallen for… But to progress the poem, I must choose. So for link #10, I welcome Andy and his china doll into the poem.

This means that link #11 is now open for submission – 3 lines, keeping with the theme of love. So let’s keep the passion, and make this poem burn bright to its very end.

Look forward to you all taking the leap!


My Aching Back: Shisan
Started: 15 May 2013 – Finished:
Written between: Matt Hetherington, Lyndon Norton, Ashley Capes, Lee-Anne Davie, Chris Lynch, Mal Keeble, Chloe Callistemon, John Wainwright, Nigel Ellis, Andy Smerdon,

Side 1jo – preface

Link #1 (3 lines) – hokku (autumn)

my aching back
a leaf falls
from a branch

(Matt Hetherington)

Link #2 (2 lines) – wakiku (autumn)

as I put down the rake
the sky darkens

(Lyndon Norton)

Link #3 (3 lines) – daisan (non seasonal)

in the shed
removing a dropcloth
from old paintings

(Ashley Capes)

Side 2ha part one – development

Link #4 (2 lines) – winter  moon

gravy smears the dinner plate
winter moon

(Lee-Anne Davie)

Link #5 (3 lines) – non seasonal

I regret
the light switch

(Chris Lynch)

Link #6 (2 lines) – non seasonal

the old dog dreams
of the chase

(Mal Keeble)

Side 3ha part two – intensification

Link #7 (3 lines) – spring blossom

the puppy
pisses on all
the daffodils

(Chloe Callistemon)

Link #8 (2 lines) – spring

spring shower
yolk burst on the tongue

(John Wainwright)

Link #9 (3 lines) – non seasonal

behind teeth
a storm gathers
I cannot swallow this

(Nigel Ellis)

Side 4kyu – finale

Link #10 (2 lines)- non seasonal, love verse

china doll
still holding hands

(Andy Smerdon)

Link #11 (3 lines) – non seasonal, love verse
Link #12 (2 lines) – ageku (summer)


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20 responses to “Shisan: My Aching Back (Links #10 – #11)

  1. ha – i like the china doos, holding hands..

  2. I’m finding this process of writing poetry quite intriguing with interesting results.

  3. miguel


    his blushed cheek
    fresh ink bursts
    on the canvas

  4. Andy Smerdon

    naked words
    delve slim shadows
    slow dancing

  5. moonshine
    dark intent

  6. Aaron Schalock

    glimmering eyes
    greet me each day
    as I return

  7. #11
    the river at high tide…
    the distance between us

  8. morning in bed
    between us the glow
    from smartphones

  9. incoming tide
    waiting for
    the next wave

  10. #11
    your fragrance lingers
    skimming rocks
    at sunset

  11. #11
    which half
    would you like, mate?

  12. #11
    trade winds
    her silhouette revealed
    with each puff

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