As the shisan builds to a crescendo, it seems fitting that we burst into the theme of love for links #10 and then #11. Love is such a wild landscape, so I was very keen to see where people were going to land with their offerings.
John started things off playfully, revealing the nut within after being kissed and returned later to be kissed again while watching his lover fold the wing mirrors back… such a sexy image!
Andy delivered an image that continues to startle for its original link… the presence of the china doll so beautifully lets the seething air out of Nigel’s previous verse, and although seemingly fragile, has enough strength to keep hold of his hand.
Likewise, Chloe’s link startles for its originality… the image of a bite wrapped in a scarf has a searing beauty and again adds a passionate dimension to the previous poem.
Cindy fills us with a heartbroken longing as we stand, completely empty, on the shore. Love can be a desolate place sometimes…
Miguel gives us two poems that bristle with the urgency of love… one exhaling a name in a cloud of steam and the other exploding from the lips.
Mal also gives us two poems, one of which playfully connects two hands as the change is fumbled and the other which strips things to bare metal.
And finally Jonathan maintains his gentle sense of playfulness, shaving once for work and once for his lover.
As you can see, there are many links here that I myself have fallen for… But to progress the poem, I must choose. So for link #10, I welcome Andy and his china doll into the poem.
This means that link #11 is now open for submission – 3 lines, keeping with the theme of love. So let’s keep the passion, and make this poem burn bright to its very end.
Look forward to you all taking the leap!
My Aching Back: Shisan
Started: 15 May 2013 – Finished:
Written between: Matt Hetherington, Lyndon Norton, Ashley Capes, Lee-Anne Davie, Chris Lynch, Mal Keeble, Chloe Callistemon, John Wainwright, Nigel Ellis, Andy Smerdon,
Side 1 – jo – preface
Link #1 (3 lines) – hokku (autumn)
my aching back
a leaf falls
from a branch
Link #2 (2 lines) – wakiku (autumn)
as I put down the rake
the sky darkens
Link #3 (3 lines) – daisan (non seasonal)
in the shed
removing a dropcloth
from old paintings
Side 2 – ha part one – development
Link #4 (2 lines) – winter moon
gravy smears the dinner plate
Link #5 (3 lines) – non seasonal
the light switch
Link #6 (2 lines) – non seasonal
the old dog dreams
of the chase
Side 3 – ha part two – intensification
Link #7 (3 lines) – spring blossom
pisses on all
Link #8 (2 lines) – spring
yolk burst on the tongue
Link #9 (3 lines) – non seasonal
a storm gathers
I cannot swallow this
Side 4 – kyu – finale
Link #10 (2 lines)- non seasonal, love verse
still holding hands
Link #11 (3 lines) – non seasonal, love verse
Link #12 (2 lines) – ageku (summer)