Shisan: My Aching Back (Links #6 – #7)

A weekend in big sky country has given me plenty of time to read and ruminate on the 6 poems offered for Link #6. As always, each poem creates a new pathway for the poem, a new vision…

Two poems have been jostling for the position today… and only now, after sitting with the poems for many hours am I ready to move the poem on.

The poems are:

the old dog dreams
of the chase

(Mal Keeble)

The shock of the light and the cockroaches is echoed here in the disturbed sleep of the old dog. The music and movement of this poem makes it an exciting link.

*

deep breathing
in a library of ladders

(John Wainwright)

The deep breath here also echoes the shock of the light and the cockroaches and the library of ladders adds an unexpected strangeness.

*

Both poems are worthy of the position, but there is only room for one, and this time I have moved forward with Mal’s ‘dreaming dog’. This means that the call is now open for Link #7. We are now looking for 3 lines, that bring us a unique spring blossom image; something that really slaps the senses!

So leap boldly into the warmth of the season.

*****

My Aching Back: Shisan
Started: 15 May 2013 – Finished:
Written between: Matt Hetherington, Lyndon Norton, Ashley Capes, Lee-Anne Davie, Chris Lynch, Mal Keeble

Side 1jo – preface

Link #1 (3 lines) – hokku (autumn)

my aching back
a leaf falls
from a branch

(Matt Hetherington)

Link #2 (2 lines) – wakiku (autumn)

as I put down the rake
the sky darkens

(Lyndon Norton)

Link #3 (3 lines) – daisan (non seasonal)

in the shed
removing a dropcloth
from old paintings

(Ashley Capes)

Side 2ha part one – development

Link #4 (2 lines) – winter  moon

gravy smears the dinner plate
winter moon

(Lee-Anne Davie)

Link #5 (3 lines) – non seasonal

I regret
the light switch
cockroaches

(Chris Lynch)

Link #6 (2 lines) – non seasonal

the old dog dreams
of the chase

(Mal Keeble)

Side 3ha part two – intensification

Link #7 (3 lines) – spring blossom
Link #8 (2 lines) – spring
Link #9 (3 lines) – non seasonal

Side 4kyu – finale

Link #10 (2 lines)- non seasonal, love verse
Link #11 (3 lines) – non seasonal, love verse
Link #12 (2 lines) – ageku (summer)

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19 responses to “Shisan: My Aching Back (Links #6 – #7)

  1. The old dog dreams of the chase

    circus left town many push up daisies

    Sent from my iPhone

  2. Graham pls ignore my previous comment half a draft of nonsense to sleep on & my finger slipped on send! Time for bed. Melissa

    • gnunn

      I know thew feeling of slipping on send when I should be slipping off to sleep. Hope you get the time to send a redraft in for Link #7 Melissa.

  3. #7
    honey-eaters
    poets sample with tongue and ear
    Callistemon blossoms

    #7
    naked in a deckchair
    the veteran sailor offers
    his last primrose

  4. ladpoetry

    #7

    fairy floss crystals
    on her cheeks
    cherry blossom

  5. Andy Smerdon

    #7
    brazen buds
    scarlet petals display
    spring tryst

  6. #7
    pink and grey galahs
    tap dance over
    the tin roof

  7. morning glory
    tightens
    its grip

  8. Link #7
    a crow’s call
    wakes me
    jacaranda clouds

    (this is surprisingly hard to keep up with! :))

  9. This poem has finally succeeded in keeping me awake at night 🙂 Not happy with my earlier effort, I offer another #7

    grandad’s gerbera’s
    wake from their
    crusted slumber

  10. Link #7
    along the edge
    of her grave
    a row of daffodils

  11. #7

    my mud-covered boot
    unable to dodge
    pink fairy aprons

    And for you JdUb (and sorry Cindy…):

    the puppy pisses
    on all
    the daffodils

  12. #7
    new vicar
    wears a daisy chain
    listens to grass

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