A weekend in big sky country has given me plenty of time to read and ruminate on the 6 poems offered for Link #6. As always, each poem creates a new pathway for the poem, a new vision…
Two poems have been jostling for the position today… and only now, after sitting with the poems for many hours am I ready to move the poem on.
The poems are:
the old dog dreams
of the chase
(Mal Keeble)
The shock of the light and the cockroaches is echoed here in the disturbed sleep of the old dog. The music and movement of this poem makes it an exciting link.
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deep breathing
in a library of ladders
(John Wainwright)
The deep breath here also echoes the shock of the light and the cockroaches and the library of ladders adds an unexpected strangeness.
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Both poems are worthy of the position, but there is only room for one, and this time I have moved forward with Mal’s ‘dreaming dog’. This means that the call is now open for Link #7. We are now looking for 3 lines, that bring us a unique spring blossom image; something that really slaps the senses!
So leap boldly into the warmth of the season.
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My Aching Back: Shisan
Started: 15 May 2013 – Finished:
Written between: Matt Hetherington, Lyndon Norton, Ashley Capes, Lee-Anne Davie, Chris Lynch, Mal Keeble
Side 1 – jo – preface
Link #1 (3 lines) – hokku (autumn)
my aching back
a leaf falls
from a branch
(Matt Hetherington)
Link #2 (2 lines) – wakiku (autumn)
as I put down the rake
the sky darkens
Link #3 (3 lines) – daisan (non seasonal)
in the shed
removing a dropcloth
from old paintings
Side 2 – ha part one – development
Link #4 (2 lines) – winter moon
gravy smears the dinner plate
winter moon
(Lee-Anne Davie)
Link #5 (3 lines) – non seasonal
I regret
the light switch
cockroaches
Link #6 (2 lines) – non seasonal
the old dog dreams
of the chase
Side 3 – ha part two – intensification
Link #7 (3 lines) – spring blossom
Link #8 (2 lines) – spring
Link #9 (3 lines) – non seasonal
Side 4 – kyu – finale
Link #10 (2 lines)- non seasonal, love verse
Link #11 (3 lines) – non seasonal, love verse
Link #12 (2 lines) – ageku (summer)
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The old dog dreams of the chase
circus left town many push up daisies
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Graham pls ignore my previous comment half a draft of nonsense to sleep on & my finger slipped on send! Time for bed. Melissa
I know thew feeling of slipping on send when I should be slipping off to sleep. Hope you get the time to send a redraft in for Link #7 Melissa.
#7
honey-eaters
poets sample with tongue and ear
Callistemon blossoms
#7
naked in a deckchair
the veteran sailor offers
his last primrose
#7 (revised)
naked in a deckchair
the old salt offers
an olive branch
#7
fairy floss crystals
on her cheeks
cherry blossom
#7
brazen buds
scarlet petals display
spring tryst
Lovely
#7
pink and grey galahs
tap dance over
the tin roof
morning glory
tightens
its grip
so who’s the queen of inuendo now?
it’s still you, L-A
Link #7
a crow’s call
wakes me
jacaranda clouds
(this is surprisingly hard to keep up with! :))
This poem has finally succeeded in keeping me awake at night 🙂 Not happy with my earlier effort, I offer another #7
grandad’s gerbera’s
wake from their
crusted slumber
Link #7
along the edge
of her grave
a row of daffodils
#7
my mud-covered boot
unable to dodge
pink fairy aprons
And for you JdUb (and sorry Cindy…):
the puppy pisses
on all
the daffodils
for me? how kind? a suggestion
the puppy
cocks a leg on
a cockaleekie
#7
new vicar
wears a daisy chain
listens to grass
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